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The First Instinct by ~crypticpoet:iconcrypticpoet:



She presses her hand against the chilled window,
Soaked with raindrops, like her face with tears.
Her hot breaths cloud the pane,
Her empty heart boosts the pain.

Why can’t she forget him?
Everything around her screams a memory,
Her pain is built into these walls.
The first instinct: escape.

The door screeches an old protest
As she leaves the apartment block.
Her feet tripping over the ground,
Her heart tripping over the pain.

She stumbles her way, in the pouring rain,
Over to the swimming pool.
The flush of an indoor piece of nature
Seems to calm her somewhat.

The water reflects such tranquility,
Like what is below the surface
Only it can touch.
The first instinct: dive.

The water smoothes against her face,
But nothing seemed to change.
She made the wave, she broke the calm,
But the following silence is far more haunting.

Like it was with him.

Each word of love he used to speak
Etches into her very soul,
A thousand knives, too much to handle.
The first instinct: Drown.

Now she can’t love him anymore.
©2004-2009 ~crypticpoet
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Author's Comments

Just some thoughts I was having...


Can't seem to stop haunting me...

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WOOHOO!!!!!!!!! YYYYYYYYAAAAAAAAYYYYYYYYYYY!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!

That piece is AMAZING. I offer many many many congratulations on that. Absolutely no errors or anything that should be changed... And you got across what she was doing as well as her inner torment very neatly indeed. Snaps for Tobie

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:iconloislane03:
wow i like that a lot...i like the pain and pane thing...and the descriptions are great!
:iconwildkard:
How sad, but on a poetic basis, ¡es muy buena!

I can never do poetry like that,
rhythm and rhyme-wise.
My mind doesn't work like that
Or maybe cuz I never tries.

Again, I salute you! :salute:
:iconcrypticpoet:
Ahhh I'm sure you can! You can do anything if you work at it!! This was seriously crappy to me...but someone's added it to their faves so I gotta keep it up here lol.

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